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Olasq spotting her was an accident. What happened next wasn’t.
She twirled in the clearing, moonlight soaking into pale skin. Olasq snuck closer, dagger held out, grabbing hand readied.
She stopped, facing him. “You came to dance?”
Olasq saw cloudy eyes. Blind, he thought: a poor witness.
He sniggered. “Don’t struggle, and I won’t hurt you. Much.”
Her eyes spewed blinding light, hurling him backwards, into the shadows’ arms. He was jerked around, dangling feet drawing circles in the dirt, screaming soundlessly.
She resumed the ritual.
They found Olasq babbling, drooling, unable to explain. And evermore, terrified of the moon.
Word count: 100. Written for this week’s Friday Fictioneers flash fiction challenge. Big thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting, and to Dale Rogerson for providing this week’s original prompt photo, below. Click on the link above to post your own story, and to read everyone else’s!
Photo © Dale Rogerson
I’m sorry it’s been so long since I’ve posted, or visited some of my favorite pages. I’ve been busy with birthday celebrations and other social activities, including my sister visiting and lots and LOTS of cooking and eating. It was wonderful to enjoy so much time with friends and family, but I’m looking forward to getting back to a little more quiet reading and writing time now!
Serves him right! Hehehe! (wicked cackling ensues as eyes flash).
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I sure thought so! Thanks for reading!
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Ha! Seems Olasq got more than he bargained for. Was she a priestess of the moon? Eyes that can blast out magic must surely come from the moon goddess. A great read read, Joy!
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He probably guessed she was just another moon-worshipper but yes, it does seem like she was actually a bit higher-ranked with the moon goddess than that! Thanks for reading Eric, glad you liked it.
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Great write. Sounds like Olasq got was coming to him.
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The punishment was pretty harsh, but hey, he messed with the wrong priestess. 😉 Glad you liked it!
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simply magical. served him well.
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Thanks — I like to see the bad guys get what they deserve!
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Dear Joy,
Olasq certainly got more than he bargained for, and, it sounds like deservedly so. Atmospheric piece. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle! I’m glad you enjoyed it, and that you noticed the atmospheric bits.
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Ha! Not the easy victim he supposed.
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Yep, he was figuring, “I’m armed, she’s naked… OOPS!” You know what they say: don’t bring a dagger to a magic fight.
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I like the strength in your piece. Don’t mess with the goddess of dance. Welcome back! Glad you had fun with your sisters. Sister time is THE best.
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Thanks for the welcome, it’s good to be back! Although now I’m turning around and having to deal with all those tasks that got put off, and then I’m on jury duty next week, and a big deadline at work, and.. ugh, when will I have time for writing?!? But I agree: it’s worth running late to be able to spend time with my sister; she really is the best!
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Great story.
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Glad you thought so — thanks for commenting, Trent!
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He won’t find any sympathy from me! Great story! :o)
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Not from me, either! Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for reading!
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Lovely lovely
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Glad you thought so – thanks for reading, Michael!
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Love when tables turn… and he was rightly pushed to lunacy….
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Worse than lunacy, even, are the times when he knows the truth and cannot communicate it or get anyone to believe. It’s really a horrible punishment. Thanks for reading Bjorn, glad you enjoyed it!
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Love the writing in this creative take on the prompt.
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Thank you for the nice comment; I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Yay! The bad guy loses!
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You betcha — when I have anything to say about it, the bad guy *always* loses. 🙂 Thanks for reading!
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Great story! Loved it!
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Glad to hear it – thanks so much for reading!
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Well he got what he deserved. Well told
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Thanks Michael, glad you enjoyed it!
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Wondering what your moon worshipper was in the middle of there – a spell for what purpose? And what awful plans did Olasq have for her? Dread to think. Love the pictures you’ve painted here, that image of his heels dragging circles in the dirt – just perfect to show us the power of her magic. Lovely work Joy
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I’m so glad you hooked onto the bit about his heels dragging circles. When I wrote that, I was specifically thinking, “Hm, what kind of descriptive detail would Lynn add here?” I didn’t think about what exactly she was doing, but “soaking up” the full moon is a common devotional ritual among the various sects of Salientim (those who worship Saliente). While she’s there, she’s probably praying for her daily (er, nightly) infusion of magic from the goddess, so she might have been all full up on spells by the time Olasq interrupted. If she can command the shadows to grab him and twirl him around like that, she’s pretty high level. Even if she was not “full up” on spell power, he shouldn’t have messed with her.
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Well, the detail really worked! 🙂 And if she wasn’t up to full speed magic wise, folk who cross her are in trouble when she is!
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That was fabulous, Joy! Comeuppance well deserved…
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Thanks Dale! In real life, the “bad guys” too often get what they want. I like the stories where a jerk tries to hurt someone thinking that they’re weaker than him (or her), only to realize that the intended victim is, in fact, stronger. If only real life were more like that.
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Fun fantasy!
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Thanks Dawn, glad you enjoyed it!
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Olasq wasn’t expecting that! I loved the description in this piece, Joy. The atmosphere you created was gripping. Hope you had a great birthday! 🙂
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Thanks, Sammi, glad you enjoyed it. And yes, I had an excellent birthday, thanks for the good wishes!
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Hurray for her. He certainly picked on the wrong person. Good writing with great description, Joy. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks Susan, glad you enjoyed it!
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A wonderfully gripping little scene, Joy. The woman certainly had impressive powers. Great writing. 🙂
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She certainly had powers he hadn’t anticipated, to his detriment! Glad you enjoyed it, Millie, thanks for reading.
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Me again… I’ve just noticed your ‘following’ button which indicated I didn’t follow you! I’ve followed you for ages, so I must have knocked it off at some stage. Sorry about that.
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That’s happened to me too; so easy to hit the wrong button. Welcome back. 🙂
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