Razing Faith

Azadi Tower Tehran Iran

Photo of Azadi Tower, Tehran Iran © Avesta Naseri via Google Maps


Izta ignored the gleaming edifice overhead, focusing on the cleric.  “Surrender, Haana. My orders are to prepare for the new god.  I’ll destroy this heathen temple with your people inside.”

Haana remained unbowed.  “They’re your people, too.  You were thrice-blessed here.  Think of our prayers, our stories.  The Raising.”

That mural taunted Izta. The One Hundred, chanting to lift the impossible arches, channeling unto implosion, burying themselves in the foundation.

“We’ll write new stories.”  Izta stood taller. “I’ll strip its tiles to build a temple honoring Anandani.”


Izta sighed. “Hang him.”

* * *

Even with the hold-outs dead, his men cowered at the first cut.  Izta growled, inserted the crowbar himself, heaved.

A song rose from one hundred graves.  The temple stones shattered, slicing into flesh below, until the screams and dust subsided.

* * *

The rubble remains untouched, quiet.

New stories were indeed written.  How they end depends on who tells them.

Word count: 150.  Written for this week’s What Pegman Saw challenge.  Thanks to Karen and Josh for hosting!  WPS challenges you to write a story of 150 words or less based on a specific location on Google Maps.  You can look around the area and choose whatever nearby image strikes your fancy, and maybe learn something interesting while you’re there exploring.  Click the link above to see the other stories written for this location, or to join in yourself — everyone’s welcome!

World-building note: The underlying event of this story is mentioned at the very end of the Major Societies description, when most of the Pret city-states and tribes unified under a new god, Anandani.  Unique among deities, he somehow managed to cut off divine power from all other gods in this one region (at least temporarily; we’ll see what Kakika does when she figures this out).  Countless temples and many “wonders of the world” were destroyed or silenced in the process, either by mortals trying to please Anandani or because they collapsed the moment their magical powers were cut off.

When I saw this gorgeous building in Tehran, I knew it had to be magically built and a place of great wonder and respect in Eneana.


28 thoughts on “Razing Faith

  1. Intense and well described story, the devastation and murder of these people a5 the end is very visceral. Asthis dictators men, the reader cringes too. I wonder if it was worth it if this new god will bless him at all?

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    • Well it definitely wasn’t worth it for Izta, because he got buried under the collapsing / attacking temple with the rest of the people trying to steal its tiles. Whether it worked out for the rest of the Pret…. there are those who say yea and those who say nay. Which of course, leads to interesting story possibilities! Thanks for your comment, Amanda!

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    • Great comment, Crispina, thanks! Yes, I’m fascinated by this concept of new traditions laid over the old, and how each generation seems to be blind to history. They argue for the preservation of “X” because it’s the tradition and we should always respect tradition, with no understanding of how “X” was once the radical new thing taking over and destroying tradition “Y”. Not that I can blame them, really; we all see our own traditions that way. Still, it’s something I keep slipping into Eneana history, given that I have the three-thousand-year view on their traditions.

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  2. An intense story that needed to be read three times to fix the characters and their motives in my head. A very specific example of Razing that will help you no end in the specifics of your novel, Joy, I am sure. Thanks for treating us here, free of charge.

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    • Thanks Kelvin! Sorry that you found it hard to follow at first. I tried to keep repeating the two characters’ names to help distinguish who was who, but that’s not always enough. This particular scene/issue doesn’t play into any of my current novels or novel ideas, but I do have some short story ideas that deal with the transition or its aftermath. It’s a huge world and a long timeline I have here, it’s going to take a LOT of stories to cover it all!

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      • I am sure it all flows when you are immersed in your world rather than me just dipping my toe in once a week. Keep up the good work. Don’t lose faith in your work or yourself and if you do find yourself quickly, Joy. Best wishes Kelvin

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      • No worries– it takes a lot more than that to get me discouraged! Of course the stories make sense to me, but it’s pretty useless if they aren’t clear to the readers. I think most people hesitate to admit that they didn’t get something because they worry that it’s just them. But for every one reader who says something confused them, they probably represent a lot more who didn’t say so.


  3. A piece of flash fiction in three chapters – that’s amazing! It’s a very dramatic story, full of action, but you don’t neglect description or character, and you even squeeze in some profound philosophy with your last line. An impressive piece, Joy!

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    • It did involve a fair amount of squeezing to get it down from the original concept to only 150 words, so I’m gratified to hear that you think it worked. Thanks so much for the kind comment, Penny!

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