Stone Still


Photo © CE Ayr

Everyone knows the great disasters, when our new god Anandani severed links to all other gods within his freshly renamed territory.  The floating temple, fallen.  The ice bridge, collapsed.  The silver dancers, frozen.

Our leaders freely pledged to Anandani.  Surely they had weighed his promises against his threats.

Mabbadeg’s egdalamada are less dramatic, perhaps, but more prevalent.  Amorphous rock warriors that protected his people, instantaneously stilled.  Now any odd, misshapen boulder is suspect, feared, avoided.

But not by me.  I know nothing of Mabbadeg, but I pray to him, clutching the egdalamada.

Please, hear me.  Break through.  Return.

Save us.

Word count: 100.  Written for this week’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt challenge.  Thanks to our fearless leader Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting, and to CE Ayr for providing this week’s photo prompt.   Click here to read the other 100-word (or less) stories written for this prompt!



42 thoughts on “Stone Still

  1. What starts out as an intriguing exploration of local deities ends on a highly emotional note. I can feel the narrator’s fear and pain. Knowing how real Eneana’s deities are, I hope for them that Mabbadeg listens.

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    • Thanks for the great comment, Gabi. Unfortunately, Anandani has a tight lid on the entire country — no other gods can get through within its borders. It’s the only instance of that ever happening; deities normally can’t get that “close” to Eneana (for reasons that are hinted at in the origin story “Kakika”). Unfortunately for the recently renamed Fentoren, Anandani is a capricious and unpredictable god. Downright nuts, to be honest. They may have solved some of their problems by uniting into a more coherent nation under a single deity, but boy, they adopted a whole lot more. And anyone who didn’t immediately convert — like all the priests of the previous religions — suffered the most. It’s a troubling time, which of course makes it more interesting to write about!

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    • Sadly, no other gods can even hear prayers within the realm of Fentoren, now that they have pledged the whole country to Anandani. And he is a jealous, power-hungry god, it turns out. Thanks for reading, Iain!

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    • Thanks, James! What you see here is just the tip of the iceberg, of course. That’s the great thing about having so much of the world building scaffolding done — I have this huge backdrop to use for these stories. But the even greater thing is *not* having the world building details all set in stone, so I can easily make up new details, like the “rock warriors,” which fit in just fine with the rest of it, now that I think about it. 😉


    • He hasn’t yet, and none of the other gods either. This event happens fairly late in the timeline of my world building, though, so I haven’t gone far enough yet forward to figure out what happens. It’s going to be epic, whatever it is, and probably pretty awful for the long-suffering Fentoren. Thanks for reading, Ali!

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    • The person in the story is definitely feeling desperate, and wiling to reach out to any god that might help. Something about the boulder in the image just felt profound, that way.

      Thanks for reading Rochelle!


    • Well the details differ, and of course in real life we don’t have monumental divine magic artifacts that suddenly fail when the leaders switch religions, but yes, I agree the underlying problems are pretty universal. Thanks for reading!

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